Friday, October 23, 2015

8. PitchSlam: JEREMIAH STROUT AND THE CURSE OF THE GOLDEN HARP

Title: JEREMIAH STROUT AND THE CURSE OF THE GOLDEN HARP

Genre: MG Fantasy/Adventure

Word Count: 39,000 words

Hogwarts House: Jeremiah would be sorted into Slytherin for his ambition and resourcefulness. Though his goofy personality might be deceiving, Jeremiah would stop at nothing to save and protect those he loves.

35 Word Pitch: 

Twelve-year-old Jeremiah discovers striking the strings of a harp unleashes a modern-day Clash of Clans. When the Clan kidnap his Mom, Jeremiah must save her, and the town, before they burn it to the ground.

First 250 Words

Flyerton was exactly what I expected. You couldn’t even call it a town. It was one street about three city blocks long with a church on one end and a tiny grocery store on the other…you get the picture, right? And I’m sure you’re thinking exactly what I was thinking: boring.

Even the sign going into the town looked bored--Welcome to Flyerton, Population 101. With the last number one hanging on for dear life.

But I swallowed my groan when I saw the smile on Mom's face. I hadn't seen that in a while. Not since the divorce.

"Hmm, I'm not exactly sure where the house is..." Mom slowed the car and looked at the map in her hand before she came to a complete stop.

Right then, like seriously at that exact moment, an old guy came out of the church. He had a dog with him. I think it might have been a Border Collie but it was kind of hard to tell because it looked like it had been dipped in cooking oil.

Mom pulled the car along to meet him. "Let's ask this man. Maybe he could help us."

"Mom," I whispered. "What are you doing? He could be a psycho..."

"Jeremiah," she hissed, "behave yourself."

I read a story once, where this guy pulled his car up next to a stranger who then pulled off his mask to reveal an alien head with eyeballs dangling from tentacles. 


Actually I think that was an episode of Gravity Falls, so never mind. 

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